Total of 18 critiques for "When It Burns, It Burns Like a Star" from Critters.
By far, my favorite one says this:
I'm assuming that English is not your first language, and that is the main problem here.
Huh? I'm pretty sure I've been speaking English all my life. Does this mean I suck at writing words in English? Probably, yes. Should I translate all my stories into French? Who knows. Others thought the story was excellent and my writing well-done.
I'm really surprised by the split of the critiques. They really are either for the story or against it. For my writing or against it. For my long title or against it.
I'm turning "When It Burns, It Burns Like a Star" into a novella. Hopefully, that should solve some problems. And no, I'm not taking English lessons.
I have a BA in Journalism for heaven's sake.